The Zabbaleen - Revision history

Viktor at 00:44, 4 February 2020

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Viktor at 09:05, 31 January 2020

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Viktor at 11:31, 24 January 2020

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Viktor at 11:31, 24 January 2020

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Viktor at 11:24, 24 January 2020

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Viktor: /* The Histories */

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‎The Histories

Viktor at 11:22, 24 January 2020

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Viktor: /* The Banks of the River of the Rocks */

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‎The Banks of the River of the Rocks

Viktor: /* The City of Dust */

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‎The City of Dust

Viktor at 11:15, 24 January 2020

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 ===History===
-An Egypt-like country was destroyed by a rival empire, based on Venice, some time around the Industrial Revolution. The Zabbaleen arose from the wishes of the people to fix what was broken, from their need for a new purpose. In fact, the Scarabeus has always existed within [[The Antecedent]], whose blazing rotation was halted by the Rag-picker, which caused it to hatch, birthing the Zabbaleen and shattering the aspect of Wheel into precursors of Forge, Moth, Grail, Heart, and Winter.
+An Egypt-like country was destroyed by a rival empire, based on Venice, some time around the the 15th century, during the Renaissance. The Zabbaleen arose from the wishes of the people to fix what was broken, from their need for a new purpose. In fact, the Scarabeus has always existed within [[The Antecedent]], whose blazing rotation was halted by the Rag-picker, which caused it to hatch, birthing the Zabbaleen and shattering the aspect of Wheel into precursors of Forge, Moth, Grail, Heart, and Winter.
 The Hour salvaged the big part of an entire History to make a new one, where the country has never been defeated, and prospered. Their work was almost done when the Histories started clashing and dividing: from three, six; from six, twelve; from twelve, one. The Zabbaleen's History was once again bashed to pieces and dispersed, but with that calamity came all the other Histories, with their people, things and places that were now lost and without purpose. Thus, the Zabbaleen expanded their goals. The City of Dust, it seems, is all that is left from the Zabbaleen's History, apart from an odd artifact here and there. Everything else was reforged beyond recognition.

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 | names   = The Rag-picker, Sand Emperor/Empress, Myrmeleo
 | aspects = {{Aspect|Forge}} {{Aspect|Moth}} {{Aspect|Edge}}
-| arrival = Before the Collision, from the History of Water and Sand.
+| arrival = Before the Collision, from the History of Salt and Sand.
 | owners  = [[User:Viktor|Viktor]]
 }}

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 * [[The Glorious Child]]: The Zabbaleen support the Child, often taking his plans and making them actually useful. Not all of them are given back, and not all of them even share the initial goal. They manipulate him, and groom him to become their Heir of the Sun.
 * [[Her Scarred Serenity]]: The Zabbaleen taught her servants the arts of mummification, in exchange for something?
-* [[The Embrace]]: The Zabbaleen have saved her from death, gathering her various pieces and, with [The Modiste-and-Mannequin]]'s help, weaving them into their existing Name (based on linen), gifted to them by [[The Modiste-with-Spindle]]. She is now known as the Mantle, and will become the Heir of the Dead.
+* [[The Embrace]]: The Zabbaleen have saved her from death, gathering her various pieces and, with [[The Modiste-and-Mannequin]]'s help, weaving them into their existing Name (based on linen), gifted to them by [[The Modiste-with-Spindle]]. She is now known as the Mantle, and will become the Heir of the Dead.
 * [[]]:
 * [[]]:

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 ==Relationships==
 * [[The Demiurge]]: They respect his vision and goals, but they disagree with the Demiurge's means of accomplishing those goals.
-* [[The Stone Meridian]]: This is what became of the rival empire, eventually. They hold no grudges, since without the Meridian, the Zabbaleen would not have been created, nor would they receive their purpose.
+* [[The Stone Meridian]]: This is what became of the rival empire, eventually. They hold no grudges, since without the Meridian, the Zabbaleen would not have been created, nor would they receive their purpose. They helped create it, and among other things they have gifted one of the obelisks flanking the Alabaster Door, that became the Obelisk of the Meridian, who will eventually become their Heir of Time and Pearl.
-* [[The Glorious Child]]: The Zabbaleen support the Child, often taking his plans and making them actually useful. Not all of them are given back, and not all of them even share the initial goal.
+* [[The Glorious Child]]: The Zabbaleen support the Child, often taking his plans and making them actually useful. Not all of them are given back, and not all of them even share the initial goal. They manipulate him, and groom him to become their Heir of the Sun.
 * [[]]:

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 ===Tools===
 * wip
-** Aspects: {{Aspect|SH|12}} {{Aspect|Edge|12}}
+** Aspects:
 ===Ingredients===
 * wip
-** Aspects: {{Aspect|Forge|1}} {{Aspect|Grail|1}}
+** Aspects:
 ===Influences===
 * wip
-** Aspect: {{Aspect|Winter|71}}
+** Aspect:
 ===Books===
 * The Thirteenth Indictment
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 ** Requires: wip
 ** Gives: wip
 ==Relationships==
 * [[The Demiurge]]: They respect his vision and goals, but they disagree with the Demiurge's means of accomplishing those goals.

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 ===The Histories===
-They come from the History of Salt and Sand. It is almost completely gone, now, with parts of it preserved in the form of the City of Mokattam, some random curios, the Wastelands, and Venice with its Stone Meridian, that the Zabbbaleen helped create.
+They come from the History of Salt and Sand. It is almost completely gone, now, with parts of it preserved in the form of the City of Dust, some random curios, the Wastelands, and Venice with its Stone Meridian, that the Zabbbaleen helped create.
 ==Items==

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 Also known as the City of the Dead, and rarely the City of Mokkatam. Remnants of the kingdom of Egypt that once sprawled across Northern Africa, Asia Minor and Greece, now surrounding the Ziggurat. Partially a necropolis, partially a huge garbage disposal area, filled with things that they have gathered. The only constant thing here is ceaseless change. The main entrance to it is the Alabaster Door, the River of the Rocks flows through it, and the Ziggurat Reversed is located in the middle of the City.
-====The Banks of the River of the Rocks====
+====The Paper Shores====
-The City spreads wide, and the River flows through it. Curious things wash ashore there, all of them carefully collected. This stream of ichor emerges from the Scarred Rock in the Split Mountains, one of the highest points of the House of the Wyrm, a wound caused by the Antecedent pulling themselves closer to the Glory, and the Glory closer to them.
+The City spreads wide, and the River of the Rocks flows through it. Curious things wash ashore there, all of them carefully collected. This stream of ichor emerges from the Scarred Rock in the Split Mountains, one of the highest points of the House of the Wyrm, a wound caused by the Antecedent pulling themselves closer to the Glory, and the Glory closer to them.
 The Antecedent used to frequent the River, and the vestiges of their influence can still be spotted in the Paper Shores, rich with papyrus and gilded lilies tattooed into the soil.

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 One of the Zabbaleen's most monumental landmarks. It comes from their original History, and is probably one of the rare things that are readily recognisable as coming from there. It looks like a pyramid that has been planted upside-down into the Mansus-sands, tilted slightly to the side. It will serve as the outer layer of the Scarabeus' chrysalis / cocoon, and will house them while they exist in the form of the Abeyant for a while before ascending to the Glory. It is being upgraded constantly at any given moment, and the Zabbaleen consider it their Opus Magnum. It is located in the City of Dust.
-====The Garbage City of Mokattam====
+====The City of Dust====
-Remnants of the kingdom of Egypt that once sprawled across Northern Africa, Asia Minor and Greece, now surrounding the Ziggurat. Partially a necropolis, partially a huge garbage disposal area, filled with things that they have gathered. The only constant thing here is ceaseless change. The main entrance to it is the Alabaster Door, the River of the Rocks flows through it, and the Ziggurat Reversed is located in the middle of the City.
+Also known as the City of the Dead, and rarely the City of Mokkatam. Remnants of the kingdom of Egypt that once sprawled across Northern Africa, Asia Minor and Greece, now surrounding the Ziggurat. Partially a necropolis, partially a huge garbage disposal area, filled with things that they have gathered. The only constant thing here is ceaseless change. The main entrance to it is the Alabaster Door, the River of the Rocks flows through it, and the Ziggurat Reversed is located in the middle of the City.
 ====The Banks of the River of the Rocks====