The Gorging-Shrew - Revision history

Coryn02: /* Mark */Fixed error of Mark specifications

2019-11-29T00:13:31Z

‎Mark: Fixed error of Mark specifications

Coryn02: /* Relationships */

2019-10-27T00:09:32Z

‎Relationships

Coryn02 at 23:58, 26 October 2019

2019-10-26T23:58:36Z

Coryn02 at 23:56, 26 October 2019

2019-10-26T23:56:59Z

Coryn02: /* Servants */ Added the Raucous Filch summon

2019-10-26T23:51:39Z

‎Servants: Added the Raucous Filch summon

Coryn02: /* Books */

2019-10-26T22:24:43Z

‎Books

Coryn02 at 21:11, 26 October 2019

2019-10-26T21:11:38Z

Coryn02: /* Bonemeal */ Fixed minor nitpicks about grammar in Bonemeal's post-summon description.

2019-10-26T04:40:48Z

‎Bonemeal: Fixed minor nitpicks about grammar in Bonemeal's post-summon description.

Coryn02 at 04:37, 26 October 2019

2019-10-26T04:37:23Z

Coryn02: /* Bonemeal */ Minor fix: a Name shouldn't require more of a principle to summon than they have as a card.

2019-10-26T03:00:59Z

‎Bonemeal: Minor fix: a Name shouldn't require more of a principle to summon than they have as a card.

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 # '''Temptation: Phrase: I see glimmers of pleasures and treasures long thought lost.
 # '''Dedication: Phrase: I will dedicate myself to the Gorging-Shrew, who covets and embraces the night.
-# '''Ascension: Phrase: My eyes change colors when I blink now. I've gained an irresistible urge to pick the pockets of everyone who passes by. I know this to be the First Mark.
+# '''Ascension: Phrase: My eyes change colors when I blink now. I've gained an irresistible urge to pick the pockets of everyone who passes by. I know this to be the Third Mark.
-# '''Ascension: Phrase: I can now look and sound like anyone I've met. My body grows sickly if I do not taste something new every night. I know this to be the Second Mark.
+# '''Ascension: Phrase: I can now look and sound like anyone I've met. My body grows sickly if I do not taste something new every night. I know this to be the Fourth Mark.
-# '''Ascension: Phrase: I've acquired a taste for corpses, now. I am beginning to forget my original body's shape. I know this to be the Third Mark.
+# '''Ascension: Phrase: I've acquired a taste for corpses, now. I am beginning to forget my original body's shape. I know this to be the Fifth Mark.
 # '''Ascension: Phrase: My appetites are monstrous, in both proportion and kind. I could charm, cheat, and replace anyone I wished. Now, I must only await the assistance of the Gorging-Shrew to ascend further.
 # '''A Thief in the Night''': (to be completed later)

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 ** Gives: Glorious boons. From summoning to spawning items to other beneficial effects.
 ==Relationships==
-* [[]]:
+* [[Madame Munchy]]: The Gorging-Shrew and Madame Munchy both share a fondness for strange foods, and work together to conspire larger plots within the War that Ever Rages. Most especially, She provides gateways for the Gorging-Shrew's wanderlust, and can bring physical force to bear if his evasive tactics fall through.
-* [[]]:
+* [[The Boatman]]: Despite some surface tension and an existence starkly defined by opposition to the Wild Gods, the Boatman and the Gorging-Shrew get along relatively well. The Shrew's gluttonous attitudes and taste for corpses prevent The Boatman from retrieving their memories, and is unwilling to offer any memory of his own as payment to enter the city. To compensate, the River-Maker imposes a different entry fee: retrieve lost memories from deeper within the Mansus. The Gorging-Shrew is more than happy to work for his visits to the Second City.
 * [[]]:
 * [[]]:

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 ===Spirits===
-===Raucous Filch===
+====Raucous Filch====
 <div style="text-align: center; margin-bottom: 20px;">{{ElementDescription

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 # '''A Thief in the Night''': (to be completed later)
-===Servants===
+===Spirits===
-=== [Character Name] ===
+===Raucous Filch===
 <div style="text-align: center; margin-bottom: 20px;">{{ElementDescription
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 ===Names===
-====Bonemeal ====
+====Bonemeal====
 <div style="text-align: center; margin-bottom: 20px;">{{ElementDescription
 |image       = File:TheOldGeezer.png

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 ===Servants===
-====Names====
+=== [Character Name] ===
 ====Bonemeal ====
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 |aspect5     = Winter
 |quantity5   = 12
 |fansus      = 5
 }}</div>

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 * Cuisiner aux Corps
 ** Description: A French text by Frederic Delannoy. It contains various recipes on culinary preparations possible with putrefying human corpses. Despite ongoing censorship in four Histories, the author announced a sequel before his disappearance in 1779.
-** Start Text:
+** Start Text: Delannoy's gruesome imagery pairs nicely with his exacting instructions on the stages of decay in the body, as well as where to go looking for other ingredients.
-** End Text: The skeleton warriors theme song refuses to leave your mind.
+** End Text: The crowning glory of Delannoy's work, Darling's Delight, is the final recipe. The addendum includes a rite developed in his youth, specifically to perfect it.
-** Gives: Stuff goes here. Usually lore. Sometimes languages. Sometimes things get really weird. Feel free to get creative.
+** Gives: Formulae Voluptuous, Rite of the Drowning Feast, Fascination
 ===Rites===

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 The Gorging-Shrew, if asked, would call himself many things: barterer, glutton, trickster. But above all else, he feels a strong affinity for mortals. He is a New God born of equal parts deception, yearning, and caution. The Gorging-Shrew ignores the open conflict between the Second City and the Wild Gods, preferring to sate his appetites with theft and corpses.
-Having no taste for bloodshed, the Gorging-Shrew seeks to enjoy his immortality to the greatest extent that he can, regularly walking the Mansus in human form and taking full part in the hedonism the Second City has to offer. Despite his seeming lack of ambition, he is crafty and manipulative, always seeking to forge alliances and ensure he is never too closely aligned with either faction in the War that Ever Rages.
+Having no taste for bloodshed, the Gorging-Shrew seeks to enjoy immortality to the greatest extent he can, regularly walking the Mansus in human form and taking full part in all hedonism the Second City has to offer. Despite his seeming lack of ambition, he is crafty and manipulative, always seeking to forge alliances and ensure he is never too closely aligned with either faction in the War that Ever Rages.
 ===History===
 The Template manifested from the Glory's old grandma and guides all aspirants since that day. (to be updated soon)
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 ===Appearance===
 It is far too menacing to look at. (to be updated soon)
 ===Principles===
 The Gorging-Shrew is an Hour of diplomacy, mischief, travelers, and elusion.
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 ===Mark===
 # '''Temptation: Phrase: I see glimmers of pleasures and treasures long thought lost.
-# '''Dedication: Phrase:
+# '''Dedication: Phrase: I will dedicate myself to the Gorging-Shrew, who covets and embraces the night.
 # '''Ascension: Phrase: My eyes change colors when I blink now. I've gained an irresistible urge to pick the pockets of everyone who passes by. I know this to be the First Mark.
 # '''Ascension: Phrase: I can now look and sound like anyone I've met. My body grows sickly if I do not taste something new every night. I know this to be the Second Mark.
 # '''Ascension: Phrase: I've acquired a taste for corpses, now. I am beginning to forget my original body's shape. I know this to be the Third Mark.
-# '''Ascension: Phrase: My appetites are monstrous, in both proportion and kind. Anyone I meet is charmed, cheated, and replaced the next day. I await the assistance of the Gorging-Shrew, to ascend further.
+# '''Ascension: Phrase: My appetites are monstrous, in both proportion and kind. I could charm, cheat, and replace anyone I wished. Now, I must only await the assistance of the Gorging-Shrew to ascend further.
 # '''A Thief in the Night''': (to be completed later)
 ===Servants===

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 |title             = Summon a Name-Ascendant of the Gorging-Shrew
 |start_description = Darling's Delight calls on both a corpse, and a significant intensity of Grail. Once he has been sufficiently lured, Knock will bind Bonemeal to our designs.
-|description       =  He takes the form of an elderly man; well-dressed with a glowering gaze beneath his withered face. He awaits instruction with mildly irritated reluctance.
+|description       =  He takes the form of an elderly man — well-dressed with a glowering gaze beneath his withered face; He awaits instruction with mildly irritated reluctance.
 |aspect0           = Ritual
 |aspect1           = Knock

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 # '''A Thief in the Night''': (to be completed later)
 ===Servants===
 ====Names====
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 |quantity5   = 12
-|fansus      = 0
+|fansus      = 5
 }}</div>
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 |aspect3           = Winter
 |quantity3         = 3
-|fansus            = 2
+|fansus            = 5
 }}</div>
 ==Locations==
 ===The Mansus===
-====The Template Temple====
+====The Jouvence Bistro====
-The Template spends lots of its free time here.
+Whenever he isn't romping around in the Contested Zone, the Gorging-Shrew will masquerade as one of the patrons of Bonemeal's restaurant in the Second City. Despite the efforts of both the Suppression Bureau and nosy occultists, none have been able to conclusively identify any one patron which could be him, unless he has introduced himself as such personally. Any fool who attempts to reveal his presence will usually suffer a temporary bout of madness, leading to their expulsion from the bistro.
 ===The Histories===
 The year was 285124 and the template did a thing that was important.
 ==Items==
 ===Tools===
-* The Old Geezer's Shovel
+* Everlasting Dish
-** Aspects: {{Aspect|SH|12}} {{Aspect|Edge|12}}
+** Description: A silver platter which refills endlessly with sweets. You grow ferociously hungry just by seeing them.
 ===Ingredients===
 * The Template's Brain Juice
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 ** Aspect: {{Aspect|Winter|71}}
 ===Books===
-* The book of cookie recipes
+* Cuisiner aux Corps
-** Description: It's an old book, okay? A dusty old tome? Made out of cookie batter somehow.
+** Description: A French text by Frederic Delannoy. It contains various recipes on culinary preparations possible with putrefying human corpses. Despite ongoing censorship in four Histories, the author announced a sequel before his disappearance in 1779.
-** Start Text: This is the tale of the skeleton warriors.
+** Start Text:
 ** End Text: The skeleton warriors theme song refuses to leave your mind.
 ** Gives: Stuff goes here. Usually lore. Sometimes languages. Sometimes things get really weird. Feel free to get creative.

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 |quantity1         = 5
 |aspect2           = Grail
-|quantity2         = 15
+|quantity2         = 12
 |aspect3           = Winter
 |quantity3         = 3